Jones, K., T. Young, and M. Leppma. "Mild Traumatic Brain Injury and Posttraumatic Stress Disorder in Returning Iraq and Afghanistan War Veterans: Implications for Assessment and Diagnosis. " Journal of Counseling and Development : JCD 88.3 (2010): 372-376. ABI/INFORM Global, ProQuest. Web. 20 Nov. 2011.
Jones, Young and Leppma discuss post traumatic stress disorder (PTSD) and mild traumatic brain injury (MTBI) in soldiers returning back from Afghanistan and Iraq. Soldiers with MTBI have a much higher risk for re-experiencing an extremely traumatic event through nightmares and intrusive thoughts of the incident (PTSD). Clearly the these issues have a vicious synergy that can prove extremely damaging. As the war continues, the number of soldiers with MTBI increases. These soldiers not only need medical and mental care, but their families will require support as well. While the disorders can dramatically affect how soldiers function, these disorders can be easily misdiagnosed and even over looked by many health care providers.
This article is very interesting to me as I am currently serving and my major will lead me in the direction of helping these soldiers. The article was clear, very informative and thoughtful as well. Care of not only the soldier but the soldier's family has been taken into consideration. I think the point is clear that these two often misdiagnosed or overlooked problems are creating a longer list of soldiers affected by the war. Obviously they could leave lasting scars that could be prevented if treated. At times the soldier is unaware that these symptoms are present and the added stress is just “shrugged off”, allowing the problem to fester. As the current war continues, so will the number soldiers that are affected by these issues, further asking the question: In the light of this new information, how many more "casualties" will result from the war on terror?
Post write: I feel like I this is a slightly stronger draft than the last as I added a bit more of my perspective on the article. I felt like the added information on the authors would be unnecessary as research can be done by the reader to further validate the the article. I have done some rewording and arranging as well to give it a different feel. I fell a peer review could help as far as what needs to be done. Do you think there is something missing and if so, what would you recommend to give this annotation some appeal?
Hi Nelson:
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that you found an article on a subject of clear interest to you.
Your summary is helpful, but note the absence of signal phrases, which prompts a slight loss of focus.
Your evaluative paragraph begins quite well, attesting to your own connection to the subject. But I sense here a loss of focus and purpose near the end. What makes this article's treatment of the subject effective? Remember to reference the author: that will help keep you on track.
you will need to use signal phrases to keep the focus on the author's work, right? Soldiers with MTBI have a much higher risk for re-experiencing an extremely traumatic event through nightmares and intrusive thoughts of the incident (PTSD). Clearly the these issues have a vicious synergy that can prove extremely damaging. As the war continues, the number of soldiers with MTBI increases. These soldiers not only need medical and mental care, but their families will require support as well. While the disorders can dramatically affect how soldiers function, these disorders can be easily misdiagnosed and even over looked by many health care providers.
good question but you seemt to lose focus and purpose: Obviously they could leave lasting scars that could be prevented if treated. At times the soldier is unaware that these symptoms are present and the added stress is just “shrugged off”, allowing the problem to fester. As the current war continues, so will the number soldiers that are affected by these issues, further asking the question: In the light of this new information, how many more "casualties" will result from the war on terror?
good MLA: Jones, K., T. Young, and M. Leppma. "Mild Traumatic Brain Injury and Posttraumatic Stress Disorder in Returning Iraq and Afghanistan War Veterans: Implications for Assessment and Diagnosis. " Journal of Counseling and Development : JCD 88.3 (2010): 372-376. ABI/INFORM Global, ProQuest. Web. 20 Nov. 2011.
Although its apparent that this article is interesting to me the lack of signal phrases indicates a loss of focus in my summary paragraph as well as my evaluation paragraph. Referencing the author will add the validity that my article needs. I fell the same way in the slight loss of focus. I find that it is easy to get carried away with all the information being thrown around. I think you covered what I thought was missing. I feel like I take away from this article the use of signal phrases and that it's ok to use them in the right situations.
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